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All Deviations
All Deviations


this is how I will end:

stripped bare, washed
to the bone; ransacked by memory,
or lack thereof –

too many years of pretending
this shell is empty. no red marrow
to disrupt these concave walls. hollow and
bleached white on the shore: yes,
I echo. the wind whistles through me.

I would have been a skeleton. flesh
is excess: look, I would have been bone.

a dry wind whipped the words from my mouth. I was clean
and unspoken – for a long time, I was silent.

this white shard
is impervious to the sea. no torrent of salt
shall corrode me, no such soft-scent rain
to weather this unbroken oyster.

thoughts pearlize and
precipitate – no longer pure liquid. look,
I would have died unblemished, gone to dust
a flawless whole. one grain of sand
defeats this hope.

this will be my end:

until the sun rose, and
following, like a ship, like a herald, the day.
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Written March 25-26. This took forever.

mea culpa.
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~My-never-never-land:iconMy-never-never-land: Mar 26, 2008, 9:07:33 PM
absolutely beautiful imagery... alive with texture, appealing to the senses... :thumbsup:

~Tink

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*alienhunny:iconalienhunny: Mar 27, 2008, 7:34:04 AM
This reminds me a bit of some things I've written...
Lovely work.

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=livingcomforteagle:iconlivingcomforteagle: Mar 27, 2008, 8:09:09 AM
the work was worth it. :)

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blame it on the web, but the spider's your problem now.
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~whitedloud:iconwhitedloud: Mar 27, 2008, 4:41:56 PM
It's beautiful ... not only the words and imagery, but the feeling it gave me. It's resolute but has a sad tint to it.

I don't know what inspired you to write this poem, but I'm glad you posted it for everyone to read and appreciate.
~Eiszapfen:iconEiszapfen: Mar 27, 2008, 4:48:24 PM
I liked it a lot, it is very beautiful. I thought it was going to be really depressing, and then the end is sort of hopeful, so that made me happy. :)

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If it looks like a frog and acts like a frog, then it's a frog
~Eiszapfen:iconEiszapfen: Mar 27, 2008, 4:49:08 PM
Also, does "mea culpa" mean "my fault"? (sorry if that's a stupid question)

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If it looks like a frog and acts like a frog, then it's a frog
~waterpudle:iconwaterpudle: Mar 27, 2008, 7:01:21 PM
*does the good poetry happy wriggle*

that felt good.

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wheeeeeeeeeeee!!!
~renaissance1912:iconrenaissance1912: Mar 29, 2008, 12:34:48 PM
Thank you. :heart:

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The main thing is not to be dead. -- Robert Motherwell
~renaissance1912:iconrenaissance1912: Mar 29, 2008, 12:35:19 PM
I'm glad. (:

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The main thing is not to be dead. -- Robert Motherwell