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this is how I will end:

stripped bare, washed
to the bone; ransacked by memory,
or lack thereof –

too many years of pretending
this shell is empty. no red marrow
to disrupt these concave walls. hollow and
bleached white on the shore: yes,
I echo. the wind whistles through me.

I would have been a skeleton. flesh
is excess: look, I would have been bone.

a dry wind whipped the words from my mouth. I was clean
and unspoken – for a long time, I was silent.

this white shard
is impervious to the sea. no torrent of salt
shall corrode me, no such soft-scent rain
to weather this unbroken oyster.

thoughts pearlize and
precipitate – no longer pure liquid. look,
I would have died unblemished, gone to dust
a flawless whole. one grain of sand
defeats this hope.

this will be my end:

until the sun rose, and
following, like a ship, like a herald, the day.
©2008-2009 ~renaissance1912
:iconrenaissance1912:

Author's Comments

Written March 25-26. This took forever.

mea culpa.

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:iconmy-never-never-land:
absolutely beautiful imagery... alive with texture, appealing to the senses... :thumbsup:

~Tink

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Without the heart, there can be no understanding between the hand and the mind...~Madonna
:iconalienhunny:
This reminds me a bit of some things I've written...
Lovely work.

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"Mendacity is the city we live in."

:ufo:
:abduction:
:iconlivingcomforteagle:
the work was worth it. :)

--
dark pictures, thrones, the stones that pilgrims kiss,
poems that take a thousand years to die;
but ape the immortality of this
red label on a little butterfly.
-vladimir nabokov
:iconwhitedloud:
It's beautiful ... not only the words and imagery, but the feeling it gave me. It's resolute but has a sad tint to it.

I don't know what inspired you to write this poem, but I'm glad you posted it for everyone to read and appreciate.
:iconeiszapfen:
I liked it a lot, it is very beautiful. I thought it was going to be really depressing, and then the end is sort of hopeful, so that made me happy. :)

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If it looks like a frog and acts like a frog, then it's a frog
:iconeiszapfen:
Also, does "mea culpa" mean "my fault"? (sorry if that's a stupid question)

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If it looks like a frog and acts like a frog, then it's a frog
:iconwaterpudle:
*does the good poetry happy wriggle*

that felt good.

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wheeeeeeeeeeee!!!
:iconrenaissance1912:
Thank you. :heart:

--
Anywhere I hang myself is home. -- Louis Nordstrom
:iconrenaissance1912:
I'm glad. (:

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Anywhere I hang myself is home. -- Louis Nordstrom

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